fic: Pudding Makes All Things Better - PG-13 [team]

[tielan]

TITLE: Pudding Makes All Things Better
SUMMARY: Just another day in the life of the team...but with pudding!
CATEGORY: team, friendship, hurt/comfort
RATING: PG-13
NOTES: For the sgahcchallenges "Pure Dialogue" round of Last-Fic-Writer-Standing. The object was to write a story only in dialogue, with no scene setters at all. I didn't get voted off the island this week, but I suspect this was more because I didn't commit the more egregious of grammatical errors.

Pudding Makes All Things Better

AFTERNOTES: I was aiming for subtlety in depiction, rather than bashing the readers over the head with "Oh, no! Ronon has broken his leg and the team are on the run from hostile aliens!" Considering two of my criticisms were that I didn't explain enough about what was happening, I guess I may have been a little too subtle.

Comments

[renisanz.livejournal.com]

This is one of the ones that I actually got around to reading. ;)

Anyway, I didn't get that Ronon was the one with the broken leg either. Even though I see now that there's a reference to it. For some reason I thought it was John, because he usually get whumped and he's supposed to have a high pain tolerance as well. Still, I really liked the part where Teyla was at her wit's end, thinking of stunning them all for peace and quiet.

[tielan]

I think my problem with this challenge is going to be that I don't think in the same square that most of the participants do.

So John and Rodney aren't going to be the focus of the stories, Teyla is going to have a sense of humour and practical solutions, and I'm going to do something with Ronon that involves more than him standing around and flexing his muscles.

I give it two weeks. Three at most.

[margarks.livejournal.com]

Don't feel bad about the criticism. I think this challenge was really hard because without any scene setters you really had to work hard to get people to figure out who was speaking when.

I thought yours definitely had some funny parts. I'm nervous to see what the next challenge is!

[renisanz.livejournal.com]

This is one of the ones that I actually got around to reading. ;)

Anyway, I didn't get that Ronon was the one with the broken leg either. Even though I see now that there's a reference to it. For some reason I thought it was John, because he usually get whumped and he's supposed to have a high pain tolerance as well. Still, I really liked the part where Teyla was at her wit's end, thinking of stunning them all for peace and quiet.

[tielan]

I think my problem with this challenge is going to be that I don't think in the same square that most of the participants do.

So John and Rodney aren't going to be the focus of the stories, Teyla is going to have a sense of humour and practical solutions, and I'm going to do something with Ronon that involves more than him standing around and flexing his muscles.

I give it two weeks. Three at most.

[margarks.livejournal.com]

Don't feel bad about the criticism. I think this challenge was really hard because without any scene setters you really had to work hard to get people to figure out who was speaking when.

I thought yours definitely had some funny parts. I'm nervous to see what the next challenge is!