the story isn't working

[tielan]

I don't know if it's a problem of tone, or if I just can't find the rhythm of the story, but it's extremely frustrating and really worrying considering it's due in just over two weeks.

I've rewritten this section So Many Damn Times and I still feel like it isn't reading quite right.

I don't know. Maybe I need to go watch the movies again. Or something.

In lieu of writing, I'd take sleep.