colouring exercise: Marvel AU

[tielan]

If I could get Rodney and Ronon done in time, I'd sub it for the team_sga challenge.

Preview:




(It's a Marvel AU: John goes Bug, Teyla phases like Shadowcat and has latent empathic skills. Go read my fic "Living With It" for the basics.

The original sketch is in this post. I took Rodney and Ronon out for this version to simplify the layout (and so I wouldn't have so much to colour).

Praise? Concrit?

I know that the foreshortening on John's arm isn't very good - I have to work on my foreshortening skills. How about the colouring? The layout/design? The hair??

Comments

[renisanz.livejournal.com]

I'd say the layout is good. I like how Teyla's fingers are coming through Rodney's legs.

Foreshortening. . . an extremely hard thing to master. I always turn to photo references. I suggest you do the same. If you can't find a photo, then look in the mirror and do the pose, or get a friend/family member to model for you. I remember you mentioned before that you used references.

The angle of Teyla's neck into her right shoulder needs to be at at a more distinct 90 degree angle. And I think there needs to be more of Rodney's right arm/elbow showing behind his hand, because even though it's farther back, it looks too small.

Ok (hope you don't mind), I messed around with this in photoshop to give you a better idea of what I'm talking about.

http://artgyrl.com/art/tielanArt_fix.jpg

I think it would be a lot easier if you just made Teyla's arm a bit longer rather than trying to foreshorten it when you don't really have to.

[renisanz.livejournal.com]

I'd say the layout is good. I like how Teyla's fingers are coming through Rodney's legs.

Foreshortening. . . an extremely hard thing to master. I always turn to photo references. I suggest you do the same. If you can't find a photo, then look in the mirror and do the pose, or get a friend/family member to model for you. I remember you mentioned before that you used references.

The angle of Teyla's neck into her right shoulder needs to be at at a more distinct 90 degree angle. And I think there needs to be more of Rodney's right arm/elbow showing behind his hand, because even though it's farther back, it looks too small.

Ok (hope you don't mind), I messed around with this in photoshop to give you a better idea of what I'm talking about.

http://artgyrl.com/art/tielanArt_fix.jpg

I think it would be a lot easier if you just made Teyla's arm a bit longer rather than trying to foreshorten it when you don't really have to.