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If I could get Rodney and Ronon done in time, I'd sub it for the ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-community.gif)
team_sga challenge.
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(It's a Marvel AU: John goes Bug, Teyla phases like Shadowcat and has latent empathic skills. Go read my fic "Living With It" for the basics.
The original sketch is in this post. I took Rodney and Ronon out for this version to simplify the layout (and so I wouldn't have so much to colour).
Praise? Concrit?
I know that the foreshortening on John's arm isn't very good - I have to work on my foreshortening skills. How about the colouring? The layout/design? The hair??
team_sga challenge.Preview:
(It's a Marvel AU: John goes Bug, Teyla phases like Shadowcat and has latent empathic skills. Go read my fic "Living With It" for the basics.
The original sketch is in this post. I took Rodney and Ronon out for this version to simplify the layout (and so I wouldn't have so much to colour).
Praise? Concrit?
I know that the foreshortening on John's arm isn't very good - I have to work on my foreshortening skills. How about the colouring? The layout/design? The hair??
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Foreshortening. . . an extremely hard thing to master. I always turn to photo references. I suggest you do the same. If you can't find a photo, then look in the mirror and do the pose, or get a friend/family member to model for you. I remember you mentioned before that you used references.
The angle of Teyla's neck into her right shoulder needs to be at at a more distinct 90 degree angle. And I think there needs to be more of Rodney's right arm/elbow showing behind his hand, because even though it's farther back, it looks too small.
Ok (hope you don't mind), I messed around with this in photoshop to give you a better idea of what I'm talking about.
http://artgyrl.com/art/tielanArt_fix.jpg
I think it would be a lot easier if you just made Teyla's arm a bit longer rather than trying to foreshorten it when you don't really have to.
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But thank you for pointing out Teyla's neck and head, and the point about her arm. And I'll look at what I can do for John's forearm and claw.
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That's John, huh. Sorry. Honestly, the reason I took it for Rodney was because he looks...kinda out of shape. So, I'd definitely prescribe slimming his arms, chest and waist down a bit.
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Ok, I see it's John in the face now. And the hair should have been a giveaway as well. But yeah...
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Foreshortening. . . an extremely hard thing to master. I always turn to photo references. I suggest you do the same. If you can't find a photo, then look in the mirror and do the pose, or get a friend/family member to model for you. I remember you mentioned before that you used references.
The angle of Teyla's neck into her right shoulder needs to be at at a more distinct 90 degree angle. And I think there needs to be more of Rodney's right arm/elbow showing behind his hand, because even though it's farther back, it looks too small.
Ok (hope you don't mind), I messed around with this in photoshop to give you a better idea of what I'm talking about.
http://artgyrl.com/art/tielanArt_fix.jpg
I think it would be a lot easier if you just made Teyla's arm a bit longer rather than trying to foreshorten it when you don't really have to.
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But thank you for pointing out Teyla's neck and head, and the point about her arm. And I'll look at what I can do for John's forearm and claw.
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That's John, huh. Sorry. Honestly, the reason I took it for Rodney was because he looks...kinda out of shape. So, I'd definitely prescribe slimming his arms, chest and waist down a bit.
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Ok, I see it's John in the face now. And the hair should have been a giveaway as well. But yeah...
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